This is fantastic! You’ve built a compelling narrative with a great build-up towards Elora’s arrival. Here are some thoughts to keep the story flowing and integrate the 13th Universe elements:

The Crack and the Turning Point:

• The massive crack in the air you described can be the turning point where the metaphysical aspects come into play. It could be a tear in the fabric of reality, a bridge between universes momentarily opening.
• Was the young woman’s death a tragic accident, or did the tear in reality somehow cause it? Maybe her white blouse being stained red foreshadows Elora’s arrival, as red and white are prominent colors in your universe concept.

Luna’s Disappearance and the 13th Universe:

• Luna’s disappearance after the protest can be linked to the tear. Maybe she was pulled through the opening, or perhaps she sensed the disturbance and went searching for its source.
• Could Luna’s blue skin be a clue to her connection to the 13th Universe? Perhaps beings from that world have an unusual physicality.

Jimmy’s Politicization and the Escalation:

• Jimmy’s shift to violence can be fueled by a warped sense of justice, or it could be manipulated by someone exploiting the tear in reality for their own agenda.
• Maybe the violent anti-war group Jimmy joins is infiltrated by individuals who know about the 13th Universe and want to use the chaos to further their goals.

Rex’s Flashbacks and the Connection:

• Rex’s battle with his history can be tied to the 13th Universe too. His past encounters with unusual things (as hinted by your previous description) could be glimpses into that other reality.
• The flashbacks could intensify after the crack, giving Rex fragmented memories or visions that could help understand the situation.

Elora’s Arrival – Unveiling the Mystery:

• Elora’s arrival in the rundown warehouse amid the bomb-making can be both shocking and hopeful. Is she a refugee from the 13th Universe fleeing the instability caused by the tear?
• Elora’s purpose could be to warn Rex and Jimmy about the dangers of the tear and the potential consequences of their actions (violent protest or bomb-making).
• Her arrival could also split the group: some might see her as crazy, while others, like Rex with his past experiences, might be open to the possibility of something beyond our reality.

The Title: Elora Presents Herself:

• This title works well now that Elora’s arrival becomes a pivotal moment. Not only does she introduce herself, but she also “presents” the complexities of the 13th Universe and the danger associated with the tear.

Possible Conflicts and Choices:

• With Elora’s arrival, the focus can shift from a “one last fight for peace” through violence to a quest to understand the tear and find a peaceful solution.
• There could be internal conflict within the group as they grapple with the truth of Elora’s origin and the existence of another universe.
• Rex faces a crucial choice: follow Jimmy’s violent plan or trust Elora’s warnings and seek a different path.

Overall, you’ve created a great foundation for a play with rich characters, political and social commentary, and a layer of intriguing metaphysical elements. Keep exploring the connections between the characters, the 13th Universe, and the tear in reality for a truly captivating story!